Get-Fit Friday: My Paragraphs

This was interesting exercise, so I thought I’d share my version. It’s long, so I thought I print each step as a separate post. If anyone wants to share theirs, I’d love to see it; just put a link to it in the comments below.

Here’s my five paragraphs (and the books they came from). They’re in the order I grabbed the book they came from. The first two lack page numbers because I forgot to note them and didn’t want to have to go through the books page by page to find them.

Original Paragraphs

#1

But she had to face reality. He was as much a workaholic as she was. She was getting in dive hours on her day off; he admitted that he worked from before he was even supposed to be in the building until after he was supposed to leave, and took work home with him. He was, he’d told her, a one-dimensional man.

Lisle, Holly. i see you. Onyx, New York © 2006. p.

#2

Duncan depressed a glowing action-sequence button and the wings snapped up and down, climbing high above the lava cap of the volcano. The jetpods kicked in, and the wings went into lift attitude. He let up on the power. Resser hauled himself all the way inside in a tangle of arms and legs. Wheezing and out of breath, he wedged himself into the meager open space beside Duncan in the cockpit and began to laugh.

Herbert, Brian and Kevin J. Anderson. Dune: House Harkonnen. Bantam Spectra, New York, © 2000 by Herbert Limited Partnership. p.

[Did anyone else find themselves selecting later paragraphs that would more likely work with the first ones?]

#3

 A religion with quite a few adherents these days, loners out running around. Sometimes there were organized runs, races: Thread the Labyrinth, Chaos Crawl, the Transmarineris, the Round-the-Worlder. And in between those, the day discipline. Purposeless activity; for art’s sake. For Nirgal it was worship, or meditation, or oblivion. His mind wandered, or focused on his body, or on the trail; or went blank. At this moment he was running to music, Bach then Bruckner then Bonnie Tyndall, as Elysian neoclassicist whose music poured along like the day itself, tall chords shifting in steady internal modulation, somewhat like Back or Bruckner in fact but slower and steadier, more inexorable and grand. Fine music to run by, even though for hours at a time he didn’t consciously hear it. He only ran.

Robinson, Kim Stanley. Blue Mars. Bantam Spectra, New York. ©1996 by Kim Stanley Robinson. p. 453.

#4

Tolonen leaned forward, looking down out of the porthole. The spaceport was off in the distance ahead of them, a giant depression in the midst of the great glacial plateau of ice—the City’s edge forming a great wall about the outer perimeter. Even from this distance he could see the vast, pitted sprawl of landing pads, twenty li in diameter, its southernmost edge opening out onto Hsuan Wu Lake, the curve of the ancient Yangtze forming a natural barrier to the northeast, like a great moat two li in width. At the very center of that great sunken circle, like a a vast yet slender needle perched on its tip, was the control tower. Seeing it, Tolonen had mixed feelings. The last time he had come to greet someone from Mars it had been DeVore. Before he had known. Before the T’ang’s son, Han Ch’in, he died and everything had changed.

Wingrove, David. The Broken Wheel. Dell Publishing, New York. ©1991 by David Wingrove. p. 245

#5

Dorian threw back the covers on the bed. There was a plain sheathed sword on it. It looked entirely normal, except that the sheath was made entirely of lead, and it covered the sword entirely, even the hilt, damping the magic. But this wasn’t just a magic sword, It was more like The Magic Sword. This was Curoch, Emperor Jorsin Alkestes’ sword. The Sword of Power. Most magi weren’t even strong enough to use it. If Feir (or most others) tried, it would kill him in a second. Dorian had said even Solon couldn’t use it safely. But after Jorsin Alkestes’ death, there had been quite a few magi who had been able to—and they’d destroyed more than one civilization. “At first, I thought I was going to have to prophesy my own future to get it, but instead, I prophesied the guards’. Everything worked perfectly except one guard came down the hallway that he only had maybe a one in thousand chance of taking. I had to knock him out. The good news is, he’s going to be nursed back to health by a lovely girl whom he’ll later marry.”

Weeks, Brent. The Way of Shadows. Orbit, New York. ©2008 by Brent Weeks. p.231.

And here they are, one after another, as per the directions:

But she had to face reality. He was as much a workaholic as she was. She was getting in dive hours on her day off; he admitted that he worked from before he was even supposed to be in the building until after he was supposed to leave, and took work home with him. He was, he’d told her, a one-dimensional man.

Duncan depressed a glowing action-sequence button and the wings snapped up and down, climbing high above the lava cap of the volcano. The jetpods kicked in, and the wings went into lift attitude. He let up on the power. Resser hauled himself all the way inside in a tangle of arms and legs. Wheezing and out of breath, he wedged himself into the meager open space beside Duncan in the cockpit and began to laugh.

A religion with quite a few adherents these days, loners out running around. Sometimes there were organized runs, races: Thread the Labyrinth, Chaos Crawl, the Transmarineris, the Round-the-Worlder. And in between those, the day discipline. Purposeless activity; for art’s sake. For Nirgal it was worship, or meditation, or oblivion. His mind wandered, or focused on his body, or on the trail; or went blank. At this moment he was running to music, Bach then Bruckner then Bonnie Tyndall, as Elysian neoclassicist whose music poured along like the day itself, tall chords shifting in steady internal modulation, somewhat like Back or Bruckner in fact but slower and steadier, more inexorable and grand. Fine music to run by, even though for hours at a time he didn’t consciously hear it. He only ran.

Tolonen leaned forward, looking down out of the porthole. The spaceport was off in the distance ahead of them, a giant depression in the midst of the great glacial plateau of ice—the City’s edge forming a great wall about the outer perimeter. Even from this distance he could see the vast, pitted sprawl of landing pads, twenty li in diameter, its southernmost edge opening out onto Hsuan Wu Lake, the curve of the ancient Yangtze forming a natural barrier to the northeast, like a great moat two li in width. At the very center of that great sunken circle, like a a vast yet slender needle perched on its tip, was the control tower. Seeing it, Tolonen had mixed feelings. The last time he had come to greet someone from Mars it had been DeVore. Before he had known. Before the T’ang’s son, Han Ch’in, he died and everything had changed.

Dorian threw back the covers on the bed. There was a plain sheathed sword on it. It looked entirely normal, except that the sheath was made entirely of lead, and it covered the sword entirely, even the hilt, damping the magic. But this wasn’t just a magic sword, It was more like The Magic Sword. This was Curoch, Emperor Jorsin Alkestes’ sword. The Sword of Power. Most magi weren’t even strong enough to use it. If Feir (or most others) tried, it would kill him in a second. Dorian had said even Solon couldn’t use it safely. But after Jorsin Alkestes’ death, there had been quite a few magi who had been able to—and they’d destroyed more than one civilization. “At first, I thought I was going to have to prophesy my own future to get it, but instead, I prophesied the guards’. Everything worked perfectly except one guard came down the hallway that he only had maybe a one in thousand chance of taking. I had to knock him out. The good news is, he’s going to be nursed back to health by a lovely girl whom he’ll later marry.”

I’ll continue the next steps over the weekend.

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Get-Fit Fridays

push-upsWriting fit, that is. Every Friday I posting a writing exercise, just something to get the creative juices flowing. If you feel it, share your results in the comments below. Or just talk about what you got out of this exercise. Post your comments by midnight the following Thursday. I’ll be sharing mine and I’d love to see yours.

Today’s exercise:

  1. Pick 5 novels. Pick your favorites, or choose at random from what’s on your shelves.
  2. Starting with the first novel in the stack, open it to a random page and pick a paragraph.
  3. Copy that paragraph, word for word.
  4. Do the same for the next four books, putting each paragraph into the same document as the previous one.
  5. Now rewrite the paragraphs so that they make one continuous narrative.  Write intervening paragraphs, if you want to.

Taking it further: repeat this exercise using books from different genre(s) than you used the first time. Or, try it with five books all from the same genre, then do it with five books from different genres. How do your two results compare? Was one way easier than the other? Or do it comparing books from one genre with books from another genre. Which one worked better? Let us know your answers in the comments section below.

For GMs:

  1. Pick 5 modules or published adventures. If you don’t have five for your game system, gather as many as you can, or pull some from other games.
  2. Open the first done to a random page (yes, you can use dice) and pick an encounter
  3. Copy that encounter, word for word
  4. Do the same for the next four modules, putting all of these encounters in one document.
  5. Assess: can you rewrite these five encounters as one mini-module? Can you insert them into your current campaign?

This is supposed to be a quick, fun exercise. You don’t have to spend a lot of time on it, certainly no more than an hour or two. If nothing comes together by then, oh well. Do the best you can. Sometimes it just won’t make sense, no matter what you do. Make as much sense as you can out of it.

Has this helped get your creative juices going? Let us know how!

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